Please Queue Up

March 11 is a day that I will never forget. The government of Beijing named the eleventh day in each month The Queue Day. After school，I went back home thinking about my favourite TV programe. At the bus station，I was amazed by the long queue which is supposed to be a big crowd as usual. When the bus arrived，I rushed to the frount door which everyone is in the order. “Please Queue Up!”shouted an old man. I turned around and found the old man waving his arms. “You should queue up on the Queue Day, kid.”Then he told me about the queue Day and how important it is to obey the rules in public. I did apologise again and again，and also promised to queue up next time.
Fof sevaral times，I found it really quicker when everybody is in the order. It takes me fewer time to get home now.
So thanks to the queue up day and thanks to our government.

bus station 意为 "车站". 停车站(点)用 bus stop 好.

the long queue which is supposed to be a big crowd as usual
这句意思上不通,改为:
I was amazed by the long queue ,for people usuallly crowd here befor.

I rushed to the (front) door (while) everyone (was) in the order.

Then he told me about the queue Day and how important it (was )to obey the rules in public.

made apology(名词)

and also promised to queue up next time.
没有说这次怎样? 就没排队算了?

Fof sevaral times，I found it really quicker when everybody is in the order. It takes me fewer time to get home now.
此段时态不一致,改为:

Now I (find) it really quicker when everybody is in the order. It takes me (less) time to get home .