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Say No To Pirated Products
Nowdays,the phenomenon of pirated products has aroused considerable concern among the general public.
Why the phenomenon of products become increasingly serious? At first,some people acquire much benefit from making pirated products.What's more, a lot of people prefer to buy pirated products because of the lower price than ture products.
There're a number of harms of pirated products listed as fellows.Above all,there is no denying to the fact that the producers of priacy infringe copyringht of authors.Authors put intensive efforts to their works,including money and energy.But the producers of priacy deprive the rights of them and take advantage of their prestige to make money.Furthermore,if authors cannot get profits from their works,they will lose the confidence of producing better works.
For my part,I insist that we should restrict pirated products by laws.And we should say no to them!

Say No To Pirated Products
Nowdays,the phenomenon of pirated products has aroused considerable concern among the general public.
Why the phenomenon of products （becomes） increasingly serious? At first,some people acquire much benefit from making pirated products.What's more, a lot of people prefer to (buying) pirated products because of the lower price than （the legal copy）.
There're a number of harms of pirated products listed as fellows.Above all,there is no denying to the fact that the producers of priacy infringe copyringht of authors.Authors put intensive efforts to their works,including money and energy.But the producers of priacy deprive the rights of them and take advantage of their prestige to make money.Furthermore,if authors cannot get profits from their works,they will lose the confidence of producing better works.
(In my opinion),I insist that we should restrict pirated products by laws.And we should say no to them!
我觉得1、在这里phenomenon是主语所以谓动应该用"becomes"。
2、prefer to 中的 to是介词，后面应该跟分词的形式（buying)。
3、正版＝the legal copy
4、我觉的“从我的角度出发，以我的观点”用"in my opinion".