书面表达：
假如你叫刘明，高三学生，即将参加高考。你的英语其他题都做得不错，但是作文总是写不好。你给在你学校工作过的外籍老师Jared发一封E-mail，就如何提高英语写作这一问题向他请教，并请他帮忙批改你附上的作文，指出问题的所在，怎么改进。
注意：1.词数：100左右；
2.在内容上允许适当发挥；
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Dear Jared,
I’m in Senior 3 now and I’m preparing for the coming college entrance examination.I’m sure I can answer all the questions in NMET except the writing.I have put my heart into English writing,but I still don’t know how to write a good composition.What shall I do?You know,the college entrance examination is very important.I’m getting more and more worried with the time passing by.So I want to get some help from you.I believe you are kind enough to help,aren’t you?The composition attached to the Email is one of mine.Would you please correct it,point out the mistakes and tell me how to improve my writing?Thank you!
Yours,
Liu Ming