老师说我的英语作文是用中国式英语写成的,而且在内容方面还需要强力度的润色,我把要改的作文上传,请诸位仁兄修改一下,必感激涕零.(请您们在修改时,麻烦另打一份,不要破坏原稿)

怎么是这么老土的题目 我们那年就写过 今年还在写 哎
Living in harmony
As you known,nature provides us with food, water and space.But we,the most civilized human beings, are destroying its balance day by day through unplanned cutting, endlessly killing and daily pollution. Our development imperils other creatures losing their habitats.
We have a sort of ambition to conquer the nature.However , there is no good point in conquering it.In fact,all creatures, including our human beings,depend on the nature to live.The speed of the pollution to the nature is far beyond its self-purification ability.Take a look at your surroundings ,so many threes have been cut down ,and more large cities have been built up.A lot of creatures have died out ,and plenty of dirty water have been poured into the rivers. What is worse ,the more people there are,the more industries there will be.And there may lead to more pollution. Thus ,we should take measures to provent the nature from getting worse.
All creatures ,including human beings, are living in a family. we are sisters and brothers and all the others are our friends. Just as the song sang that we are family, from one world. We have no excuse to hurt our relatives, we should love them.
We can find more than enough reasons to live in harmony with our family members .If we can live in harmony, we can make a better nature for all of us .Otherwise, tomorrow ends.

我帮你改好了 虽然觉得似乎写的不是很切题 不过我感觉句子应该没问题了 你给你老师看看 改的很辛苦哦 你有些句子还写的蛮好的呢 我个人觉得 我也是这个风格 你写中文肯定好嘿嘿