In Kunming （昆明）
Any study abroad foreigner want join us？。You can teach us English and we can teach you Chinese。we can help each other 。It’s totally for
free。The aim is helps each other to better to
learn language。。we are undergraducate students
and we have one more year graducate 。。we want to open a english training anency ，if you
have interesting ，you can contact with me 。。
do not brother just for fun。。 Thank you！
I’ll expecting to your message

Will you want to join us in teaching students English ?
Are there any students from abroad who will want to join us in teaching students English in Kunming ？
You can teach us English and we can teach you Chinese by helping each other. It’s totally for free. Our aim is to help each other to better foregn language. we are undergraducate students. and we will be graduated one more year later. We want to establish an English training agency. If you have an interest in it., you can contact me. We’ll look forward to your message. Thank you !
请加入我们的学习合作社
在昆明的外国留学生，您愿意加盟我社教授英语吗？我们将以合作互助的方式，你教我们英语，我们教您中文，来开展工作。互助免除了彼此的费用。我们办社宗旨就是互帮互学，共同提高各自的外语水平。我们是在读的大学三年级本科生，一年后将要毕业。我们打算成立一个英语培训合作社。如果你有意向，请与我们联系。期待您的留言。

你的帖子：本身是广告，阅者五十余，应者却寥寥，关键没要求，英语错误多，还要先修改，而后可翻译，您说累不累，今后要注意。
问题1：语法、词法和句法错误太多。
问题2：Do not bother just for fun。做广告不是烦扰别人或仅为了好玩！你是来寻求合作的，要体现你的诚意，要避免此类语句。

希望高手将我的答案能改得更具广告冲击力，我代楼主谢了！