我的英语不好，但我在努力学，以后我会经常写一些作文的，希望大家帮帮我，主要是告诉我作文哪里有错误，无论是语法的还是词汇的，我在这里谢谢大家了。全文如下：
Advantage of Five-day week
A five-day week has been put into practice in China. It is obvious that five-day brought many advantage for the families, society and individuals.
First, families have benefit from it very much. The people have more time spend together or go to the park with their child. Second, it is benefit for society. The girls would like shopping with their boyfriends and the boys would like traveling with their friends in the weekend. As a result, the commerce and the tourism would be promoted. Finally, individuals also have benefited from it. The people have more time spend for their hobbit in the weekend.
In a word, a five-day week is beneficial to the society, families and individuals. It is a sign that the development of our country. Chinese much more like the five-day week.

1.注意结构是firstly,secondly,finally
建议你使用in the first place/in the second place/last but not means least修饰三点论的作文。效果比前者更好。（这是四级中常使用）
2.以下帮你大致修改后的文章：
A five-day week has been put into practice in China. It is obvious that five-day has lots of advantage"s" for the families, society and individuals.
In the first place, parents would spend more time on taking care with their children.In the second place,it's good for the society.Girls prefer shopping than travelling in the weekend. However, "economic"and the tourism would be promoted by five-day week . Last but not means least,we could spent more time in our hobbit.
In a word, a five-day week has lots of advantages for the society, families and ourself.
3.advantage 还没有深入论述到位。希望以后多注意改善这方面。