English is on interntional language,extensive apply for international trade. China's opening-up encourage more people start learning English.
Entry into WTO and Beijing2008 olmpiad con, spur more people start learning English.
Conduct new situation's young girls and boys,
only can be good at English. Future can more birght .
English is very improtant. We must learn good English. So we can speak with more people. And China and world is very kind.

这是习作么??基本还好啦,主要问题是注意动名词和一些细节,我把有疑问的地方用括号标出来你看看呀

English is on(??) interntional language,extensive(ly) apply（ing） for international trade. China's opening-up encourage(s) more people (to) start learning English.

Entry(ing) into WTO and Beijing2008 olmpiad con(??Olympic Games?), spurs more people to start learning English.

Conduct new situation's young girls and boys,
only can be good at English. (Giving the circumstance that China entered into WTO and the coming 2008 Beijing Olympic, young boys and girls are encouraged to pay more attention to English study.)Their future is bright.

Future can more birght (拼写和语法错误) .

English is very improtant. We must learn good English (we must learn English very well). So we can speak with more people. And China and world is very kind. (外国人正式写作从来不用and but so等连词开头，记住哦~~这句可改成 Therefore we can open our horizons and make our country and the world more closer!)

加油呀！！！多看看英语native作者的作品，一定会进步的！