作文是关于分数和能力的，有些人认为成绩重要，有些人认为培养个人能力重要。


In recent years, there has been a heated debate on marks and ability.
Some people maintain that, marks is good for student study.
There are many example to support the idea.
One example is that marks can let de student understand the study circumstance in a period of time.
Another example is that marks can urge on the study that the student makes great effort more.
Other people think that ability is far more important than marks.
In their eyes, student if ever the good marks also doesn’t represent to have personal very strong ability.
For instane, the exaltation of comprehension and analytical still can’t see out from the score.
I think that both marks and ability are also important.
Is just pure of emphasize to can’t take on the other hand.

这个应该是提纲把。我感觉框架可以。但是其中语法和用词的问题挺大的，比如我觉得urge（催促），而促进的话promote会更贴切；make more effort（great就不用啦）；in their eyes感觉也有点Chinglish了，之后的那句话我没怎么看懂，是不是想说“分数高低并不代表能力好坏”（High score does not stand for great ability）？后面这句表达得也不对哦，如果要表达：理解力和分析能力也并不能从分数中完全体现出来，可以说：High score does not embody one's comprehensive and analyzing ability.Both... and...后面也没有必要用also了，最后一句完全不理解了。
以上这些是个人意见，也只是其中几点，我觉得楼主在完成以后给专门的老师改一下比较好。加油啊。